She clarified my questions and I know what direction to take on all of the remaining notes except one: Cut a minor character or keep him? Do you cut a character just because you can? Usually I'd say yes, but now I'm rethinking it. I'm tempted to keep him just because I like him. Instead of cutting him, I may give him something more interesting to do.
Since Everyone Loves Blue Dog is not going to fly as a title, I suggested The White Mark instead. It was deemed "pretty good," which is a better reaction than any of my other titles have gotten. Of course, if that's the one we go with, Harvest of Fire will need to be retitled as The [Adjective] [Noun], possibly even The [Color] [Noun]. Much thinking to be done.
And yeah, the protagonist's tears come too early in the book, before we get a chance to know him. I knew I'd need to rewrite that scene, but now I'll have to take out the crying (mostly... mwah hah hah hah... kaff kaff! -- Jeez, that evil laughing's hard on the throat).
Now I must pick up the boy from school.
Hey, did you watch the video from my previous entry? About the neuroscientist who has the stroke? Don't miss out.