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I’m going to post a couple sentences I just corrected in my latest draft of Man Bites World. See, I always give a copy to my wife to read. She’s severely dyslexic, and if I screw up a sentence she can’t just glide over it. She also catches plot dumbosity. For now though, a sentence or two:

“Take of this, would you, Ray?”

which of course is missing the word “care”, making it sound as though Rays reluctantly taking communion.

Remind sometime me to tell you the story of how I got into this life

Apparently, Yoda makes an appearance in this book.

Finally:

I made long vertical slashes six inches apart, then I stepped up onto the ceiling and did the same to it.

No, Ray doesn’t really become Spider-man in this book.

Now I get to go to bed and stare at the ceiling, imagining all the screwy sentences we’ve missed.

Mirrored from Twenty Palaces. You can comment here or there.

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brownkitty
Mar. 27th, 2010 04:31 am (UTC)
Now I'm wondering if there's going to be a bloopers page somewhere :)

burger_eater
Mar. 27th, 2010 04:40 am (UTC)
It'd be longer than the book!
bedii
Mar. 27th, 2010 12:36 pm (UTC)
Don't worry: if you miss any, Thog will make sure everyone knows...
burger_eater
Mar. 27th, 2010 01:41 pm (UTC)
I'm a self-Thogger. Shameful but true.
geniusofevil
Mar. 29th, 2010 06:05 pm (UTC)
If it helps, my mind filled in all the blanks.
burger_eater
Mar. 29th, 2010 06:23 pm (UTC)
No proofreader, you!
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    Oh, yeah, excellent point.
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    The creepiest part is that some of them are actually well meaning.
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    Yeah. It's godawful what people will do when they have authority and no fear about using it.
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